Yolanda's Housewarming

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Yolanda's Housewarming

Unread postby Hypercat » Tue Apr 07, 2015 10:58 pm

http://www.mummified.net/storiessz/yola ... rming.html

This is one of the first stories I readed on this site and still one of my favourite because of the chastity wrapping.
But....
When it said: "I laid there, alone and mute and helpless, for what seemed like a week or so; it’s amazing how time creeps when you have no way of measuring the agonizingly slow passage of time" and "A month or so later, I saw a shadowy form in front of me" my suspension of disbelief collapsed.
I read it again to be sure I hadn't misunderstood back then (My english has improved pretty much since then). But it's such what's written, and it ruines all. I mean: I'm an adult. I can't assume someone can stand there without food, water and tolet installement.
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Re: Yolanda's Housewarming

Unread postby KinkyTrash » Wed Apr 08, 2015 12:35 am

Yeah, I hate it when the stories get unrealistic. After it happens once the whole story falls apart. And then they do it again, and it just becomes even more of a pile of rubbish. Most of the most recent stories are by someone named Daffy Duck, and he does that a lot.
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