Comments - The Exhibition of Jade
RE: Comments - The Exhibition of Jade
Hi, this is one of the stories in the Vacuum bed competition, But it's only my second attempt at writing anything, and the other one was 3 years ago. I know that a lot of people might think it too long for a short story and that it could be kinda dull because of that, but i was working on the theory that "a story is as long as it takes to tell" So if anyone has any other comments or ideas thaty may help me to write better stories, that would be apreciated.
RE: Comments - The Exhibition of Jade
If you want comments on a story it is a good idea to include a link to the story.I will not be posting any comments on any story in the contest until the contest has closed, since I don't want anyone to think I am trying to sway the results.If you are interested in my personal views then PM me about it and if you are lucky I will have a look and comment when I get around to it. But that might be a while
RE: Comments - The Exhibition of Jade
Ok now the contest is over i feel it's ok to try and get as many people to read my story without feeling like i'm trying to mess with the votes or anything like that. Ok here is the link http://www.grometsplaza.net/latex/conte ... fjade.html Please tell me what you think about it. Thank youkinkyme2009-08-26 04:04:15
RE: Comments - The Exhibition of Jade
These are the comments I originally composed on this story:The Exhibition of Jadehttp://www.grometsplaza.net/latex/contest/stor ... e.htmlThis is a really wonderful story, and the plot idea is quite new to me. The general concept of bringing sex and art together is one I have seen before, but I don't think I have ever seen it approached quite like this.The story gets off to a strong start, and also makes some very powerful and well thought out points about the nature of the world we live in.The characters and especially the emotions really shine through for me. There are little moments when things don't seem to quite go exactly to plan, which gives everything a very real and believable feeling, since in real life such things are bound to happen sooner or later.The idea of what is going to happen is very sexy, and the actual events come the end live up to the early promise wonderfully. I loved it *happy smiles*