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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby JaneRose » Thu Nov 10, 2005 12:24 am

Hello all...thanks for taking the time to read this posting.I have begun to write fantasy scenarios for a friend of mine who I am additionally just beginning a D/s exploration with.  I have been writing, what at this time, has become a cliff hanger/continuing saga story.  I present the sections to him as the story continues.  He really enjoyed the first part, and I have just completed the second part/first draft.  Here is my question.  The story revolves around a submissive who has just been caught, and confronted with, the cyber chatting and games she has been playing with other Doms.  Her Dom has been monitoring her computer activity for some time and has contacted the other men with her story.  Now here is my dilemma...the story has evolved into a punishment scenario, fulfilling "play" fantasies that she has been sharing with these other Doms, but really had no specific interest in ever pursuing.All of the Dom's have thought up and posted, via a chat site, specific punishments for her incorporating the fantasies that she teased them with, which she will endure through out the night at the hands of her own Dom.  Without wanting to be "uninspired" and taking ideas from other stories, I was wondering if anyone could offer any interesting suggestions.  I need inspiration!  Thank you!JaneRose 
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Gospodin » Thu Nov 10, 2005 3:43 am

[quote="JaneRose"]The story revolves around a submissive who has just been caught, and confronted with, the cyber chatting and games she has been playing with other Doms. Her Dom has been monitoring her computer activity for some time and has contacted the other men with her story. Now here is my dilemma...the story has evolved into a punishment scenario, fulfilling "play" fantasies that she has been sharing with these other Doms, but really had no specific interest in ever pursuing.[/quote]

This sounds like a great set-up! The sub is in a great conflict situation, making for great storytelling. She no doubt became wet dreaming of the various situations, but now that they are real the fear and anxiety can make for a wonderful story.

I personally love self-punishing devices. One that I have always wanted to try on a woman is a simple one that I call a "strappado enema". The slave is bound bent forward in an armbinder strappado, the counterweight to which is a large enema bag.

When she lowers her arms to releive the stress on her shoulders, the bag is raised above the level of her plugged rear, and the fluid flows into her. If she wants to stop the flooding, she has to raise her arms back into a strappado (difficult if the bag has lost too much weight!)

It's the sort of thing that in real life would take a lot of experimentation and testing before it actually worked, but in a story a clever dom character can set it up in a public restroom stall if need be

What sort of punishments are you looking for?
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby JaneRose » Thu Nov 10, 2005 4:23 am

Thanks for responding...I am very excited to keep working on this and yes, I believe that her fear/anxiety (but ultimate fantasy fulfillment) can be very fun!  That is what I am hoping for, punishments that she may not have really wanted to experience, but deep down, always hoped that someone one day might actually force her to endure = real submission/slavery!I am interested in anything that will just get my juices flowing, so to speak...I love all kinds of scenarios, bondage, chasity, slavery, body modifications...but have never myself experienced "real" punishments, thus find it difficult to come up with something that will be both terrifying to her, but ultimately really exciting as well...does that make sense?  I can read all kinds of scenarios on this site, but am ultimately hoping not to just "copy" any one thing...although there are many very exciting stories on this site, many scenarios that I love!  I am just seeking some interesting input/ideas.Thank you again!  And thank you for the idea as well, it is going into my inspiration folder!  Please feel free to ask any other questions you may have.JaneRose  
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Guests » Thu Nov 10, 2005 5:31 am

Terrifying but exciting- oh yeah that makes sense! Sounds like you're doing pretty well already, you don't seem to need much inspiration JR. I can't seem to stop thinking of ideas myself! I like the one with the victim standing or kneeling over a dildo, her arms tied overhead. The floor is covered in oil & as she tires, she's unable to stop her legs sliding apart with obvious consequences.....Have you looked at the sites in the Links on this forum? Places like www.bdsm.library.com   www.tied-and-true-tales.com  and all the sites with pics have heaps of ideas and scenarios. I have a question- can we see the story too??  tojo 
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Darkraptor1 » Thu Nov 10, 2005 12:37 pm

[quote="tojo"]I have a question- can we see the story too??  [/quote]

Yes, I think we could get more ideas if we saw the story.
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby JaneRose » Thu Nov 10, 2005 10:08 pm

Here is the story, hope it helps!  Part 2 is still in the draft stages...I think!  Thanks for the responses, it is appreciatedJaneRose[size=12]Part 1[/size][size=9]You know that she is a slut, she cannot help herself…this is why You had been monitoring her activity on the internet…You had begun to suspect that something was going on…[/size][size=9]As You know how inept she is when it comes to more elaborate computer applications, this was easy for You to accomplish, easy for You to hide from her. After a month of monitoring her activity, You were very clear that a strict punishment was in order. Today, You had planned, was the day to make sure that she would never question her place, now and in the future, that she would never again "entertain herself" by conversing with other Doms, even if it was only cyber. As far as You were concerned, it had seriously impacted Your training of her.[/size][size=9]i had been having flings here and there for sometime, never seeming to ever really be satisfied, until i had met You. Although i cannot deny that the internet has always been such a seductive place for me; the stories, the pictures, the porn… this last year, i had simply become insatiable. [/size][size=9]i had been surfing the internet one evening and happened to come across a link for a D/s role playing chat site. Because i had been to many before with no real success, i had my doubts about this one. Much to my surprise however, there were actually serious minded men there and i became completely obsessed with chatting, logging on whenever i had the opportunity, i just couldn’t help myself. i met many Doms over the short time i had been chatting, however i never really considered anything serious, simply found it fun and entertaining. i began sharing some of my more insane fantasizes via the internet. i began letting these men make me do things to myself. i played along with their demands that i photograph myself for them. i only told them that i had obeyed their cyber punishing of me for "disobeying" their bidding. As far as i was concerned, it was all fun and games. i did not take any of it seriously, i just found it amusing to tease and play cyber games with these guys. [/size][size=9]You discovered pictures she had taken of herself…You are positive that she had thought she had destroyed them. You discovered that she had been masturbating for others, masturbating without Your permission…something You believed she should be quite clear on by now. You found that she was sharing fantasizes with others that she had feigned interest in. You realized that she was playing games with these men. You decided that it was time to make some of these play fantasizes of hers come true, even though You knew that she would not enjoy them, would never participate in any of them willingly…this would be her ultimate punishment for being a cyber whore to these men this last month. This would be a punishment which would make her once and for all understand, and never question again, who was her true Master.[/size][size=9]You knew her schedule down to the last minute, so there had been no problem arranging Your punishment for her. You had been quite busy, making the preparations, she had been unaware of what You were working on out in the garage…she had been too busy in the chat site to even inquire…[/size][size=9]i came home that evening after a very long day on my feet at work, spending the majority of my day tending to many high maintenance customers. i was exhausted, and certainly not in a very good mood. i longed for a hot bath and relaxation…and maybe later on, a little cyber play time. i thought that You would be working late that evening and thus believed that i had some time to myself. i had undressed and began to run a bath for myself, relishing my alone time ahead. i had heard a noise, but paid little attention to it, believing it was simply the neighbors next door. Suddenly, before i knew it, You were there and had grabbed the hair at the back of my head in Your hands and began to forcibly drag me out of the bathroom. i screamed and yelled at You, i fought and tried to get away…i wasn’t in the mood to play that night, i didn’t care to get used or to be pleasing. Little did i know however that nothing was in my hands that evening. [/size][size=9]You had made it a point to contact each of these men, telling them her story, that she had been playing games with them. You requested that they each come up with a punishment for her, that you yourself would administer. You additionally made damn well sure that they would have the pleasure of documentation for her willful disobedience and lies to them all. [/size][size=9]i was dragged into the living room and pushed down harshly on my knees in front of the computer. my arms were twisted around and severely bound behind my back and a huge gag was stuffed into my mouth that instantly made me begin to droll all over myself (which You have always known that i hate). i then watched as You logged onto the chat site. i was stunned, i had no idea that You even knew about this site. You began to type out "she is here and you may each now post your punishments for her to see". God, there they all were, each and every Dom that i had been chatting with, all simultaneously posting punishment after punishment…i was humiliated and ashamed and terrified that i had been caught and that You had been the instigator of what was to come. i was forced to read every punishment posted, i knew that i was about to endure more then i thought that i could ever bear. [/size][size=9]Part 2 [/size][size=9]You watched her there kneeling in front of the computer, reading right along with her as all the punishments continued to be posted onto the chat. Droll running down her chest, tears streaming down her face, her body trembling uncontrollably…feeling the weight of Your decision. You cared about her, You didn’t want her to hurt, but realized deep down that this is what she must endure for her further growth into submission and slavery. You believed that, deep in her psyche, she even craved this scenario. [/size][size=9]You had screened all of the punishments in Your correspondence with these Doms prior to this evening. You absolutely wanted them to be true punishments, something she would never forget. However, You additionally did not want to lose her trust and faith in You either. Many were a little too sadistic as far as You were concerned and these You did request be altered in some way, but You did agree to many of them outright. A few of the Doms had even arranged to send You items that they specifically wanted used on her, that they wanted photographed as proof in the documentation that she had been punished in some way by them, while utilizing Your hand. You had incorporated these items into the space that You had been preparing for her in the garage. [/size][size=9]i recognized all of their id’s, as i was forced to continue reading each punishment as they came up on the screen. i finally understood that this was no joke…they were in fact the men that i had been chatting with God, how did he know? i didn’t understand, i thought that i had covered all of my tracks.[/size][size=9]As i read, i began to see many of my fantasy "play" scenarios. However, as far as i was concerned, these were simply fantasies, they always had been. Scenarios that i had dreamed up after reading all those fantastic bondage erotica stories, stories which i would frequently masturbate to, but truly never would want to actually experience myself in real life…that is why they are called fantasies after all! i realized that these scenarios were no longer going to be something to "play" with, i was going to experience them, whether i wanted to or not. i knew without a doubt that i had no control over the situation that i now found myself in. It was at that moment that i knew what it truly meant to be a slave. [/size][size=9]i begged and pleaded with You, "Please Sir, i promise that i will never disobey You again…i shall be faithful to You…i will never speak with another again…Please Sir, don’t let this happen to me…i will do anything that You desire of me…just please don’t do this, god please." And although these words were muffled by the gag, i did get them out to the best of my ability. i even attempted using the "i’m sorry" expression that had always worked in the past, but You simply would not listen. i could see it in Your eyes, i had hurt and angered You…as far as You were concerned, i deserved everything that i was soon to endure.[/size][size=9]Finally, all had been posted. You typed into the chat that it was now time for her to receive her punishment. That You were now taking her to the place You had prepared. You reminded them to "stay tuned" to what had been discussed previously, that You would advise them when all was completed.[/size][size=9]i didn’t understand the last few sentences that You typed into the chat. What were they to "stay tuned" for? [/size][size=9]You then turned off the computer and hoisted her up to her feet. You then pulled out a heavy steel chain that You had hidden under the sofa and wrapped it a few times around her neck. An additional length was secured around her ankles. You locked all of the chains into place and used the remaining length at her neck to drag her naked into the garage… [/size][size=9][/size][size=9][/size][size=9][/size] 
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Guests » Fri Nov 11, 2005 3:26 am

Thanks for the enlightenment. We imaginative types need the background to get our creative energies flowing. I like the bit about her drooling over herself around the gag. My favourite pics are close ups of that, with the victim looking directly at the camera (yes I know, I'm repeating myself...)So- she's on her way to the garage, hands tied behind her, with a chain around her neck & ankles & a large gag in her mouth. Lucky girl.It's a good story, quite intriging. I'd like to hear more about how it feels to her, perhaps. I like stories where the writer (usually female) seems to describe just how it feels to be in the particular scenario. This is the first one you've written is it? Not too bad at all, we've got some talent here, in this forum. Get back to that keyboard immediately!tojo
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Darkraptor1 » Fri Nov 11, 2005 1:52 pm

I'm still scratching my head for ideas (Normal bondage isn't my specialty), but I do like how you did this first part, switching back and forth between the view of the lady and the guy.  My only suggestion is that you might want to create a sign that shows when you're switching back and forth between them.  For example, [quote][size=9]You knew her schedule down to the last minute, so there had been no problem arranging Your punishment for her. You had been quite busy, making the preparations, she had been unaware of what You were working on out in the garage…she had been too busy in the chat site to even inquire…[/size][size=9]i came home that evening after a very long day on my feet at work, spending the majority of my day tending to many high maintenance customers. i was exhausted, and certainly not in a very good mood. i longed for a hot bath and relaxation…and maybe later on, a little cyber play time. i thought that You would be working late that evening and thus believed that i had some time to myself. i had undressed and began to run a bath for myself, relishing my alone time ahead. i had heard a noise, but paid little attention to it, believing it was simply the neighbors next door. Suddenly, before i knew it, You were there and had grabbed the hair at the back of my head in Your hands and began to forcibly drag me out of the bathroom. i screamed and yelled at You, i fought and tried to get away…i wasn’t in the mood to play that night, i didn’t care to get used or to be pleasing. Little did i know however that nothing was in my hands that evening. [/quote][/size][size=9]Now, try putting an asterick or two between the paragraphs.[/size][size=9][quote]You knew her schedule down to the last minute, so there had been no problem arranging Your punishment for her. You had been quite busy, making the preparations, she had been unaware of what You were working on out in the garage…she had been too busy in the chat site to even inquire…[/size]**[size=9]i came home that evening after a very long day on my feet at work, spending the majority of my day tending to many high maintenance customers. i was exhausted, and certainly not in a very good mood. i longed for a hot bath and relaxation…and maybe later on, a little cyber play time. i thought that You would be working late that evening and thus believed that i had some time to myself. i had undressed and began to run a bath for myself, relishing my alone time ahead. i had heard a noise, but paid little attention to it, believing it was simply the neighbors next door. Suddenly, before i knew it, You were there and had grabbed the hair at the back of my head in Your hands and began to forcibly drag me out of the bathroom. i screamed and yelled at You, i fought and tried to get away…i wasn’t in the mood to play that night, i didn’t care to get used or to be pleasing. Little did i know however that nothing was in my hands that evening. [/quote][/size]Aside from that, the only other issues I could see were lower case "i"'s and capital "You"'s where they were not needed.  Good job!
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby JaneRose » Fri Nov 11, 2005 10:30 pm

To Tojo and Darkraptor:  Thank you for being so nice to read the story and give me feedback...It is very much appreciated!Tojo...the story is still a work in progress...it is an ongoing story, these are just the first two parts to sort of establish everything, it will continue, believe me...this is where I am currently stuck, the "punishment" scenario in the garage.  I do know however how I am going to end the story already, at least this particular "saga", but really I am just very stuck right now.  And yes, it is my first story, although I do write quite a bit in general...and also read a lot!To Darkraptor...I had thought about changing from regular writing (You) to cursive writing (i), so I will consider your suggestion in that regard.  Additionally, the reason why I have "You" capitalized and "i" in lowercase is because I am writing this story specifically for a man that I have begun to explore a D/s relationship with and he requested that I format it this way.  And Darkraptor, I am not specifically seeking "bondage" punishments, anything intriquing that you can offer, based on what you have read thus far, would be great!Thanks again to both of you!JaneRose 
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby Guests » Fri Nov 11, 2005 10:46 pm

She could be left tied in the garage- in an X to the beams overhead, with her ankles wide apart, facing the door. A sign around her neck, or written on her with texta- 'please come in & abuse me'. Her Dom turns on the light, blindfolds her, puts earplugs in place, then makes a lot of  noise opening the garage door. In her mind, she's standing just inside the open doorway, naked, legs & arms wide apart with the light on for all the world to see. However, he's actually left the door closed , the breeze on her naked skin is from a fan & it's him that comes back, smelling & sounding different & starts touching her.Just a thought...tojo
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RE: Need suggestions

Unread postby JaneRose » Sat Nov 12, 2005 1:13 am

That's fabulous Tojo...Thank you!
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