Oranges and lemons

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feline
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RE: Oranges and lemons

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Oranges and lemons http://fetish.pornparks.com/boundstorie ... /oranges_l emons.htmlhaving read this, and looking back on it, i am tempted to take issuewith the lack of character development and depth, but on reflection ithink this would be unfair.we are given some glimses into the characters, enough to make thempeople, to let us care about them and feel drawn into whathappens.  this story does not really seem to be about characterdevelopment in a deeper sense, so it would be childish to complainabout this :)things move very quickly, but again this is what the story is about.ultimately it is not quite what i am looking for in a story, but it isvery hard to pin down why that is.  the story is very wellwritten, the bondage comes fast and furious, and there is a good senseof the feelings and emotions that go with all of the naughty ideas the only thing i can really take issue with is the way the ladycomments on the motivations of the twins.  specifically she is theone telling us why they have to lower her so quickly.  yet theynever say this, she seems to just pick it up by telepathy, or someother magical method.  it is a small point, but one worth keepingan eye on in future stories.overall, if you have not yet read this go and have a look, you will probably be pleasently surprised

Guests
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RE: Oranges and lemons

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I read this story weeks ago & haven't stopped thinking about it since! I don't know what it is about it, it's a bit sci fi & a bit etheral for my usual tastes, but it enthralled the heck out of me. I actually printed it out & read it in bed, something I never do. I found it kind of haunting in a way. Good choice Feline, you have an eye for a good story. tojo 

jezziebelle
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RE: Oranges and lemons

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Feline, what can I say, sometimes a girl needs her bondage fast and furious without all that character stuff  Sometimes I have ideas that are just about the bondage, and sometimes they are about the interaction of characters. Being a kind and personable soul yourself, your preference for a little more character development is natural. I hope my future stories will appeal on that front.Tojo, wow, glad I entertained you and very pleased to have been taken to bed Thanks to both of you for posting your comments. Lots of pink fairy dust...

dodgerfan
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RE: Oranges and lemons

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 I love your story You should write more stories 

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