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Before I begin this story, I would like to pose a request. I've been asked to continue writing it to the point where what I have here would be just a chapter of a full erotic book. As such, I need to have a name for this story. After you have read it, I would appreciate suggestions. Now, without further ado...

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"You, in the car." commanded Katherine, an attractive woman in a 26-year-old body, as she approached her fleet of vehicles. She was directing her command at Stephan, her loyal caretaker. Both Katherine and Stephan have an… odd relationship with each other. Although if you weren’t looking for it you would just assume that is how those with money are.

Stephan, a 30 year old man at this stage of his "life", if that's what we'll call his service to Mistress Katherine, must always be available to her every whim and fancy. One night, he'll be her butler, another her driver. He might find himself carving up a nice snack for her at 1:00am, or even to simply stand just outside her room awaiting her to wake up and making sure she is undisturbed while she sleeps. Aside from cleanup duties, which are constant, he must also keep himself in peak physical shape. There is no room for ugly servants to Katherine. In fact, Stephan is the last of over 500 servants to the Mistress. He has also been with her the longest.

For Katherine, normal life is boring. Just a part in a play she must act out for all to see. As the wee hours of the night approach though, she usually can drop the charade to embrace her darker side. Few know about Katherine's true desires. Those who do will never speak of it, though it wouldn't matter if they did because no one would believe such stories from them. The only one who could confirm such things would be Stephan. This would never happen though. Stephan's service to his mistress has forever been unquestioning. There is too much at stake for him should he ever fail her. He may keep her secrets, but she also keeps his.

And so, just like every night Katherine has called upon Stephan to service her needs yet again. But something is different this night. Stephan can sense a change occurring but is not yet sure what to make of it. Brushing off the feeling as just a trick of the imagination or blaming his feelings on the tidal pull of this night's full moon.

In a dash, Stephan opens the rear door of the Lincoln Town car for Katherine only to see she had already passed him and was waiting by the passenger side door of a lowly Saturn instead. This was not a great sign for Stephan. He knew the only reason this car was ever used was when Katherine didn't want to be noticed.

Indeed, Stephan would be right. Katherine did have dark intentions tonight, and unbeknownst to him, Stephan is to be the target. She had been planning this evening a long time. Ever since he helped to disposed of her last maid. She knew he would never reveal her secrets to anyone. Who would believe him anyway? Besides, she knew his secrets too. It may be this fact alone that brought about tonight's plans. Stephan is often fairly reserved on the outside. Far too polite even. But Katherine saw something in him the last time she had her fun with the maid. A darkness that matched her own, perhaps even rivaled it. It was a brief glimpse but she saw it all the same. She thought, "If the tables were turned and he were the one in charge, what would he do in the same situation?" She felt she knew exactly what he would do, and now it was time to put an end to his servitude, but not without a bit of fun first.

"I'm waiting," exclaimed Katherine, tapping her heavier than usual purse on the rear passenger side door of the Saturn. Stephan hurried to open her door for her and get himself in the driver's seat. "Where to tonight ma'am?" asked Stephan. Even with the anticipation eating at her she still keeps a calm demeanor. She can't risk spooking him, plus it will be fun to see how long she can draw out this high of hers. Knowing what is to come and poor Stephan being so clueless in her eyes has begun to excite her even before she has sprung her trap. She wondered what other fun she might be able to have with her handsome servant. "I feel like a drive. Find me some entertainment." Katherine stated.

The evening progressed like most outings do. Stephan would drop Katherine off at the front of one club or another so she could cut the line by "talking" to the bouncers while he would park the car and wait in the line till he could get in the normal way. He felt it would be better to simply wait in the car, not being much of a people person himself, but lately his mistress has demanded that he come in to still cater to her needs while she parties. When Stephan would finally get in, Katherine would likely be upset that it took him so long and that she had to have some stud get her drinks for her. This often upset him. Not just because he was expected to do so much for her, but he was also a bit jealous too. Stephan doesn't just serve Katherine out of obligation. He actually has feelings for her to some extent. This fact is not lost on Katherine, who actually never asks for any drinks but wanted to see how jealous Stephan might get if he thought she was flirting with other attractive men. She always wondered what buttons it would take to make him lose control and act on this own impulses.

Tonight Katherine didn't like any of the locations Stephan had chosen and so chose a few of her own. Determined to get some kind of rise out of him, at this last club Katherine had even made the line move slower for Stephan by making the bouncer take his time letting people in. She had to because she knew that as soon as Stephan did get in he would seek her out and never take his eyes off her. Although she loved his attention, she couldn't allow him to see her making plans, otherwise some of her fun would be over before it started.

Within seconds of getting in, Stephan spotted Katherine dancing seductively with a group of leather bound men. The sight was a bit more shocking than most clubs he had to enter that night. "Who wears head to toe skin tight leather to a club," thought Stephan. As he began to approach Katherine's spot in the crowd, the feeling of a hand rubbing at his crotch suddenly broke his concentration. Stephan looked down to see a slender and dainty hand reaching around him and begin to unzip his fly.

Shock couldn't begin to describe Stephan's reaction to such a thing. He spun quick, ducking down a bit to further distance his groin from this strange assailant. Before his eyes stood a virtually nude woman, wearing just a pair of spiked heels, silk panties, and a corset that left her perky breasts exposed. Only little pieces of tape kept her from being even more indecent. "Oh come on big boy, you are far too overdressed. Let me help you with that." Stated the woman before him. His hands zipping his fly back up, Stephan finally got a good look at what kind of club he just entered. He had been so focused on trying to locate Katherine that he failed to realize this was some kind of S&M club. Even Katherine in a revealing, black, low cut cocktail dress had too much on for this place.

Katherine laughed as Stephan turned to look at his surroundings and finally back at her. The expression of embarrassment, panic, and confusion on his face was priceless. She couldn't have planned that little surprise any better. Katherine had been building to this little trick for a while. Slowly desensitizing Stephan by having him read erotic stories to her from outside her door and wearing more and more revealing outfits around him. Every club they had gone to slowly amped up the kink factor till it had become a commonplace thing. Plus Stephan seemed like such an uptight guy, she figured he might not even make eye contact with anyone else inside or out that was even remotely sexually dressed. She was right. The surprise was perfect.

Stephan calmed his reaction down once he had figured out he was set up by Katherine. She always tried to make him blush in some humiliating way or another. If she wasn't trying to turn him on in some embarrassing way, she was trying to piss him off. Although he was growing very tired of this game he wasn't about to make a scene this time. The first woman was a surprise indeed, which he thanked the woman for her attempt but was quite ok with what he had on. Then came the second girl who immediately kissed him as he was turning around… Stephan started to resist but remembered the first "encounter" he had here. "Fool me once…" thought Stephan as he decided to change tactics. "If she wants to turn me on, then so be it. Better than trying to pissing me off."

Katherine was still a bit giddy from having completed a successful prank on Stephan. Almost to the point where she didn't notice the blue haired girl walk right up to Stephan and kiss him. This was too good to be true. She had to convince the other girl to try to grab his cock but now complete strangers are getting in on this. She watched Stephan's reaction to this new person with baited breath. It looked like he was about to protest but all the modest concern simply vanished from his face. And Katherine watched as Stephan began to kiss back. Katherine was not expecting this and was in a bit of a shock to see her servant enjoying himself. "Good," She thought hesitantly. "He'll get to have a little fun at least…" The thought gave no comfort though. It was nagging her that he wasn't watching her anymore. That he was having a good time without her permission. That this stranger may have broken him with just a kiss while she had spent what seemed like years trying to accomplish. That her plans to publicly humiliate him and make him jealous enough to start a fight had backfired and now she was the jealous one… "You sly dog." Katherine whispered under her breath as it finally clicked what she thought was going on. Stephan was trying to make her jealous. "Oh we'll see about that."

No one likes to feel guilty, or that they have betrayed someone. It didn't help that Stephan was enjoying his situation either. The woman in his embrace bombarded his senses. Her scent of lustrous pheromones and sugary perfume, the taste of her saliva mixed with a black cherry lip-gloss, her little moans of pleasure and gasps for breath, and the feel of her heartbeat through her delicately soft skin pressed into his chest. This was all a mix of wondrous feelings he rarely experienced. He needed this. He craved this blue haired 20-year-old's warm body. And just as he looked up to thank his mistress for such a gift, he saw a look of displeasure on Katherine's face. A ghoulish looking man seemed to be getting a little too close for comfort for her. She seemed to be telling the man off. The man however didn't get the message or was not about to back down. He grabbed her by the wrist as she tried to leave, then began to grope her breast through her dress. Nearby spectators turned to see what the commotion was only to now see the homely male in Stephan's headlock.

Not realizing the reason for this attack, a few of the spectators rushed to get Stephan off the man so he could breathe. Being in much better shape than the people around him though proved to make things difficult for the crowd. There efforts to free the man only made Stephan's grip tighten even more. He watched the ghoul in his arms slowly stop flailing and his eyes begin to role back into his head. It was only as the man had become unconscious that Stephan finally looked up to where Katherine was standing, awaiting further instructions on what to do with her assailant. However, Katherine was not there. Stephan looked around only to see the angry and pleading eyes of the other club goers yelling at him to stop what he was doing. So he released his grip, allowing the man to breathe again in his passed out state on the floor. As Stephan rose, two bouncers came in to break up the "fight."

Stephan would have liked to stay and explain himself but finding his mistress was a more pressing matter. Besides, if he were to stay, no doubt the police would already be on their way, and that was something Stephan did not want to deal with. Another quick scan of the room told Stephan that Katherine was no longer in the club. Stephan had never been so panicked before. Dodging the approaching bouncers, he made his way outside to see if she might have left on her own. Sure enough, he could see her sitting on the trunk of the car. She looked both annoyed at him and pleased with herself at the same time. He hurried to her side and prepared to open the door for her. Katherine smiled though, and stated she wanted to be in front this time. This was an odd request. Not just in the fact that she had never ridden shotgun with him before, but also in the manner it was asked for. She was almost being nice about it. Stephan knew something was up but was not about to disobey his Mistress just yet, and so proceeded to open the front passenger door for her.

Katherine noticed Stephan's micro hesitation. And she knew that she nearly gave away her intentions, but she couldn't help to be pleased with how the night was progressing. Not only did she completely catch Stephan off guard with the girl in the club, but also got Stephan to come to her "rescue" from the gross guy she was enticing. Granted, she didn't anticipate the guy to get that physical with her but she was even more surprised with how quickly Stephan abandoned his own bit of fun in order to come to her aide. She was actually a little turned on by the gesture. People from inside the club had come out, looking for the two of them though, so she had to put her desires aside for a second while she ordered her servant to start driving.

They both managed to leave without anymore incident from the people at the club. Now traveling through the city without direction, Katherine's desires return to her at the thought of Stephan not only coming to her rescue but nearly getting caught for her. Something was different and attractive about him tonight, and she was not about to allow a pleasurable moment pass her by. "Take us somewhere secluded." She commanded.

Stephan was not happy about this new request. He could feel Katherine's gaze on him; sizing him up like a predator preparing to pounce on its prey. Having served his mistress for so long, and seen a similar look in her eyes right before she was about to terminate another of her staff, Stephan assumed the worst was about to happen. As he continued to get further and further away from the city, thoughts of how many ways he might have failed her raced though his head. "Up here should be good enough." Spoke Katherine eagerly. She pointed down an unlit dirt road leading to a quarry. Lost in thought, Stephan did what was natural. He obeyed, diving to what his mind had told him was the end of his service to her.

The thick forest they had been traveling through opened up to the old stone quarry. And once they ran out of road, Stephan had no choice but to stop and stare at the precipice ahead of him. He parked the car and Katherine took the keys out of the ignition. "Turn off the lights." She stated after a bit of waiting. Stephan did as he was told, still thinking of how he had come to this point. There was just so much he wished he had done faster, better, and without hesitation for her. He loved her even now, knowing full well that this was likely it for him. As Katherine started to fish through the heavy bag she brought, Stephan closed his eyes and began to wish he could just have one last chance to prove not only his servitude, but also his love for her finally.

Cold steel met Stephan's neck, along with leather wrapping around the rest of him. Katherine smiled at the shocked look on Stephan's face when he saw there was now a dog collar around his neck and she was attaching a leash to it. "You were a very naughty boy back there. Making out with strangers, starting fights, and let's not forget making me wait for you." She stated coyly in a soft voice. Shivers went up Stephan's spine at the seductive tone directed at him. He knew that this was her favorite thing to do to her former employees right before they were never heard from again. "I think you know just how bad you were too, don't you?" She whispered into his ear as she gave the leash a sharp tug, and undid Stephan's seatbelt. Stephan nodded solemnly. "You have been with me for a very long time." She added. "And such service deserves a reward. Now get in the back seat." Commanded Katherine as she pulled on the lever to recline Stephan's chair.

Adrenaline flooded through Stephan's veins as the back of his chair dropped suddenly. He crawled backward towards the back seat as Katherine crawled in pursuit on top of him. His head having met the seat behind him, Katherine took the other end of the leash and started to tie it to the handle above the rear driver's side door. She then sat back on his legs and eyed her catch. Katherine could hear Stephan's heart racing and smell the delicious pheromones of both lust and fear wafting off of his every movement. She licked her lips as her fangs began to show in the moonlight filtering in though the windows.

"Please!" Spoke Stephan quickly as Katherine bit though his belt. He looked down at her toothy grin, trying to focus on his next words carefully and not on the fact that he could see straight down her low cut dress. Her fierce eyes followed his and she gave yet another seductive smile, pulling his severed belt slowly from his pants. "Please, what?" She asked, but before he could say anything she tore his button down shirts apart and proceeded to lick from his bellybutton up to the center of his chest. She arched her back flaunting her cleavage inches from his face. Katherine looked down at the dumbstruck servant before her. Teasingly, she caressed from her collarbone down her sternum and between her breasts. "Please… show you my beautiful body?"

Stephan was at a loss for words. He had known for a long time what she was. Her cool white skin; the coffin he was charged to protect while she slept, the bloodlust as she seduced her prey into willingly offering their lives to her carnal needs. He was accustomed to it all. He even began to share her desire when she seduced the redheaded maid and drained her pussy just as fast as she drained her life. Stephan's thoughts wandered to that day and remarked the similarities between how he felt then and now.

Katherine sat back and admired Stephan's toned torso, guiding his hands up the bare thighs straddling him. She forced him to lift her dress off of her, reveling her naked ivory body. Yet another fanged smile crossed her face as she could feel movement through the fabric beneath her crotch. "Somebody wants to come out and play." She toyed. But she was too excited herself to tease anymore and wanted to see the thick cock that had been in hiding under her roof all this time. With razor like claws, Katherine shredded the cloth of Stephan's pants and underwear out of her way. It was indeed a thick, hard, cock. The heat emanating from it warmed her cold clit back to life. "Impressive… What else have you been holding back from me?" She cooed while grinding her pussy along his shaft.

The icy touch of her vampiric pussy of his manhood snapped Stephan out of his trance and he began to find his voice again. "Please, Mistress. Let me show you how good of a servant I can be." Stephan could feel something change in himself. Recounting the way he had felt disposing of the maid and combining it with the heightening senses he was now experiencing was awakening something in him that was long forgotten. "Oh really? You want to be on top do you? Beg me. Beg to fuck my pussy." She scoffed. This tactic was nothing new for Katherine. Often times, when faced with the prospect of their impending death, her prey has offered to please her once more in hopes that they will be spared. She was actually disappointed that Stephan, having seen others doing this same tactic, would attempt it too. And even before she had really gotten him to the fun parts like begging for his life first.

"Please let me fuck you. Let me have my dick warm you to the core." Begged Stephan. Katherine was actually a little surprised. She had never heard Stephan swear before. It was kind of exciting to think that she had finally corrupted him from his uptight demeanor. She began to grind into him a bit more vigorously. It couldn't be denied that he was very warm to the touch. It felt so good to have his pulsing member rubbing along her slit that she was almost starting to feel alive. "Tell me what you're going to do to me." She asked, watching his muscular body flex and tremble beneath her.

"I will fuck your cunt like it has never been before. Your body will quake with pleasure." Exclaimed Stephan. An epiphany had come to him and he was finally ready for what was to come. Weather or not this is to be his last night alive didn't matter to him anymore. All he knew was that if he was going to go out now, it wasn't going to be like how he had lived thus far.

Katherine had become even more surprised by Stephan's use of the word 'cunt'. She had never imagined such dirty talk from him. And it made her so wet to think how quickly his demeanor was changing. What could he do if he was given control? Unlikely fantasies popped into Katherine's head. Unlikely only because no human could possibly satisfy her forever, but they were fun thoughts nonetheless. "Ok, fuck me then. Fuck me like a dirty little bitch." She granted him the permission he sought, so overcome with desire that she nearly missed something important. Although the scent of lust was only getting stronger, the scent of fear was eerily absent. Plus there was another pheromone that she had never really identified, but it was getting stronger too.

Before she could even finish her thought she found herself on her back in the same spot Stephan was just in. She had her legs in the air and the tip of his cock poised at the entrance of her womb. A bit in shock of the sudden turn of events Katherine began to smell fear again, but this time it wasn't coming from Stephan. It was coming from herself. She looked at Stephan, who was gently lowering the backs of her knees onto his shoulders, and she saw a toothy smile cross his face. His reflective eyes focused on her pussy, and without an ounce of foreplay he took what he was after. His meat thrust fast and hard into her, plunging deep. The weight of his body pinned her legs to her chest and he held her wrists in one hand above her head. Even though he was the one who was collared and tied to the car, she never felt so vulnerable or used. "Ummmmm, what is happening here?" Katherine finally managed to squeak out past her aroused state.

Stephan had finally embraced his own carnal desires. Long has he admired how free Katherine had been. She was what she was and did little to hide it. Stephan had always only tried to control the beast within, but no more. Katherine wanted to be his bitch and little did she realize that was exactly what he was about to do to her. Like a wolf in heat, his goal had now become his own pleasure. And lucky for her, he sought it from her tight, wet, snatch. Katherine could feel Stephan growing even larger within her. His size and the frantic pace he was fucking her cunt was borderline painful. Friction and the heat of his body on, as well as in, her had raised her own body temperature past that of a normal humans.

Katherine stopped caring what was going on as pleasure enveloped her whole body. "Holy fuck he was right," She thought. "I have never been fucked like this." There was a sudden tug at her vagina that pulled and then pushed her entire body back and forth on the seat. His cock had knotted inside of her and they had become stuck. The sensation drove Katherine over the edge and she had her first orgasm in over 50 years as an immortal. Her juices temporarily gave just enough lubrication for Stephan to trust a few more times. The sensation had become too much for him and his body began to tense. He closed his eyes and held his breath while muscles and bones shifted and snapped into new positions under his skin.

Katherine marveled in her post orgasm at watching the transformation occurring before her. Stephan on the other hand could neither hold back his breath nor his own orgasm any longer. His free hand ripped into the seat back as the other tightened around Katherine's wrists. Katherine's vaginal walls clenched onto Stephan's giant dick and he exploded magma like cum deep into her hole. His breath burst out and into a howl as his transformation into a werewolf became complete.

Stephan panted in euphoria, his wolf eyes still closed. He removes his free paw-like hand from the now shredded seat back and releases his grip on Katherine's wrists so he can steady himself while his hot cum continues to pump into Katherine's pussy. Amazement stuns Katherine for a bit as she looks over the nearly hairless wolf-beast on top of her. Suddenly, Stephan breathlessly speaks. "I can't believe… I used the words cunt… and fuck… You had me reading… too many erotic stories… Mmmm… I've developed a dirty mouth…" He laughed slightly. "You have a dirty mouth, and I have a dirty mind… So you show me that mouth and what it can do, and I'll show you where it takes my mind." Katherine responded, caught up in the post high of the moment.

His eyes finally open and he looks down at the vampire impaled on his cock. "What is a beast like me to do… when he is exhausted from such an ordeal? I think… Eat." Stephan licked his lips, and grabbed a hold of Katherine's arms once again. Seriously worried he might not be kidding Katherine struggled to get free. Stephan was so much stronger that she thought though, and all her efforts managed to do was to free her pussy from his knotted cock. She could feel the cum pour out of her, over her anus, and onto the seats. Amused by the attempt, Stephan bent low and lapped up the dew from her navel to her chest. He then released one of her wrists so he could kneed the soft mound of her breast with him clawed paw. Jokingly testing its tenderness he states, "They seem ready to eat to me." Then with a lick, a light nibble from canine teeth, and a long slurp to suck her nipple into his muzzle, he looked back into her eyes, nose to elongated nose to let her see that he doesn't mean to harm her in that way.

She got the hint, but rather than trying to avoid being eaten, she had used her free hand to play with her sperm lubed pussy at the thought of being taken that far. But now that this softer side of him seemed to be returning, she took that as a sign that she might still be the mistress and he the servant here. "I don't want you near the top of me with that dirty mouth of yours. Be grateful you don't have long hair or you would be in trouble. I would shove you down south by it." She claimed as she began to push him to her crotch. Stephan pulled away, pinning the free wrist to the seat once again. "Is that a commanding push I feel from the dish below me?" He asked. Katherine was still very horny and this refusal to do as she wished was only fueling the desire in her loins. "Yes it's very commanding." She exclaimed with just a hint of a begging.

"Hmmm too bad my owner is no longer present. My chew toy on the other hand is very amusing, thinking it can just push me down and I will obey. Perhaps a slight bite and tug on her sensitive little buds will show her how much more in charge I am at the moment." Pointed out Stephan as he bit quite a lot harder on her nipple and began to pull on it. A human would have screamed in utter pain as her flesh would have been ripped from her chest at such treatment. Katherine screamed only in pleasure, being much more resilient than a human. She knew that he could give her everything she could want now. And right now, all she wanted was to be his bitch again. "I'm yours now, and forever." She stated as she reached yet another high while his paw clawed down the side of her body.

Stephan laughed at how easily she had turned from Mistress to slave. "What a slut my mistress must be to allow her beast to own her like this." Stephan commented. He ripped the collar from his neck and was about to make her fashion one from his broken belt, but a sudden rumble in his gut reminded him of why he use to suppress being a werewolf. Katherine heard the rumbling too and a wicked idea popped into her head. "I have a gift for you. It's in the trunk." Katherine stated excitedly. They both got out of the car, still naked and aroused. Katherine grabbed the keys and unlocked the trunk to reveal the blue haired girl from the club, bound, gagged, and nude. The aroma of fear, lust, and sugary perfume wafted out from the trunk, apparently having listened to events taking place right next to her was quite arousing to the frightened human. "Hmmm, I'm liking this new arrangement." Stephan said appreciatively. "But look how wet she is and with no way to please herself. I don't like being cruel, especially when it's the last experience they'll ever have. Why don't you clean her up in the nicest way you can for me and I'll see If I'm feeling for doing the same to you when I'm done?" He commanded.

Katherine smiled, then looked at the wide-eyed girl in the trunk and stated, "Only for my Master."
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Let me know what you thought. I love hearing reactions to the thoughts that come from my head sometimes.
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Its starting out well. I like the hook towards the end, revealing the players 'dark-side'. You will probably explain why with further writing, but I am wondering what the 'trigger' for the girl's transformation from dominant to submissive was. I think you should explain her motivation or mention what ever it was that 'triggered' the change in her. I know you mentioned she was a schemer but something like a 'switch' in attitude should be explained even in a short story as you posted here. Yes, I did see you thought this might make a chapter in a longer story but if an excerpt is to be posted, it should present the reasoning behind the events. You could do it in the form of 'authors notes' explaining the story line as necessary to give enlightenment to the posted excerpt. If this then becomes a part of a longer novel, the authors notes can be dropped as the expanded story will explain all.

After having written many full-length novels (Most well over 250K words) I know the most time consuming part of any writing is editing. I find, I can go back over what I have written a 100 times and will almost always find a spelling, grammatical or plot error on every re-read that I needs fix. Its come to the point, I can not read any story or novel without scanning for items to be fixed. I did notice just a couple of these (A 'that' instead of a 'than' in one place as an example) and my only advice would be to edit, re-edit, re-re-edit, and re-re-re-edit. This is not a critique' per se'. I find similar things in almost every novel I read and these are professionally edited and published works. Even the best literary devotees fuck up from time to time.

I did not find a 'title' staring out at me from what you've written. Nothing I could see gave rise to anything but 'corny' ideas. Funnily enough, chapter titles are something I've always had issues coming up with. I have at least four novels, completed but lacking chapter titles in a few instances. With no plot to go on, finding a title from just a scene without knowing the authors mind or story progression make it doubly difficult.

"Service of the beast' (Reference to the supernatural 'vampire, werewolf, beasts..etc and the dom/sub theme, the 'servitude' of the male character, and how he gets his chance to service the girl near the chapter end, she being the 'beast'. It is also a play on words, he is 'served' the blue-haired girl at the end by the girl character who I see at 'the beast')

'The future of fear' (you mentioned 'the smell of fear' a couple of times and I see immortality as a 'future'.)

Those were the best I could come up with based on what I read so far.

All in all, a good read and I'd give it a 7.5.

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